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Jesus saves!  I cast you out in the name of Jesus!  So screams the preacher man slamming his palm against foreheads to drive out demons.  Not more than a few feet away from the pulpit, an eighteen year-old member of his congregation claps her hands and shouts hallelujah!  

Jesus' name is again invoked a few days later as they lay sweating and groaning in the back seat of a rented car.

-See me and come live with me is two different ting


II

The girl is pretty in an unrefined way, brash and loud and totally unselfconscious.
Baby powder coats her neck, chest and back, visible in her low cut top.  

Her rival, five years her senior, cuts her eye in contempt. 'Country booboo,' she thinks. 'She look like fish ready to fry.  Plus she skin ashy and she look like she doan know how to use hot-comb.'  

Despite her belief in her superiority, her man doesn't come back.

-Puss and dog no have de same luck


III

The little boy is a-tremble with anticipation and fear.  Mustn't get caught.  He was in for a good lickin if he was.  Ah but the alluring scent of the mangoes on the vendor's tray―promising tongue-tying sweetness, is more than he can bear.  He can already feel the weight of the mango; his teeth ripping into the gold-green skin and into the pulpy flesh―feel the juice spurt into his mouth.

'Watch de tray,' his uncle had said before going down the road to the local shop to get himself a beer.  'But don't you eat me mangoes, dey is for sale.'  

'Jus one,' the little boy promises himself glancing anxiously down the road.  Then two mangoes later, 'jus one more.'

-You kyaan put mongoose to watch chicken
We have a lot of amusing colloquial sayings on my Island. Decided to have a little fun with a few. Hope you like.

Edit: Gotta I'm surprised to see this get a DD but yay! It's always nice to be recognized.

Thanks so much to *xlntwtch for the suggestion and to ^thorns for the feature. And thanks to everyone who faved and commented. :sun:
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Given 2012-10-03
You Can Say That Again by *leyghan The suggester writes, "Three island sayings are explained here, in a wonderful flash vignette written by a talented islander. This is flash fiction at its finest, both informative and informal." ( Suggested by xlntwtch and Featured by thorns )
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raspil Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012   Writer
these were cute little stories -- very well done!
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:iconleyghan:
leyghan Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :hug:
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Daghrgenzeen Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the DD, well deserved. :D
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:iconleyghan:
leyghan Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you KuiskailevaTuuli. That's such an interesting name. Is it Finnish?
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:icondaghrgenzeen:
Daghrgenzeen Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You are welcome. :) And yes, it's in Finnish and means 'whispering wind'. :giggle:
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:iconleyghan:
leyghan Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for letting me know what it means. :)
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:icondaghrgenzeen:
Daghrgenzeen Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem, I like sharing Finnish words and their meanings with people. :aww:
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:icon13thmurder:
13thMurder Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012
somehow reminds me of rasputina's lyric style...
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:iconleyghan:
leyghan Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Not familiar with rasputina but thank you. :)
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:icon13thmurder:
13thMurder Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012
here: [link]
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:iconleyghan:
leyghan Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Ooh. Thanks for the link. I enjoyed that!
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:icon13thmurder:
13thMurder Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012
a lot of their songs really remind me of this, so i figured you would.
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Sigma-Echo-Seven Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012  Student Writer
These were wonderfully clever!
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:iconleyghan:
leyghan Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :)
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:iconxlntwtch:
xlntwtch Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012   Writer
:iconcongratsddplz: ... :heart: ... just saw this and now go back to my sickbed. [I'm sick, the bed isn't.] Anyway, :w00t:!
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:iconleyghan:
leyghan Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Aw honey, I'm sorry you're sick. Hope it's nothing serious. I'm sending healing vibrations your way aka positive thoughts your way. Get well soon. :hug:

Almost forgot. Thank you!
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012   Writer
:iconyourewelcomesignplz: ...And thanks for the positive thoughts.
I caught a bad cold and figured it was over, went out yesterday, chatted with folks who then said "I have the worst cold."
And I caught the sucker again! (Or it may not've been gone.) Sheesh. There's :icontissueplz: absolutely everywhere...
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Lit-Twitter Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012
Chirp, congrats on the DD, it's been twittered. [link] :)
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:iconleyghan:
leyghan Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :)
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That was fun! :D I love how vivid each part is. Well done, and congrats on the DD.
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:iconleyghan:
leyghan Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks Lili. :heart:
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:iconhiland-rose:
Hiland-Rose Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012  Professional Artisan Crafter
I realy liked this, it was refreshing to read.
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:iconleyghan:
leyghan Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:aww: Thanks!
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:iconriparii:
riparii Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012
Ah, look who's here in the DDs today. Wonderful, I really enjoyed this one. :)
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:iconleyghan:
leyghan Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Hey you. I've got hugs and I'm not afraid to use 'em. C'mere:glomp:
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:iconriparii:
riparii Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012
I like a bold gesture. :nod:
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Gryffgirl Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012
I love all of these sayings and your little ficlets that you use to illustrate them are wonderful. I can really sympathize with the little boy in the last one! Congratulations on your DD! :clap:
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:iconleyghan:
leyghan Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:iconthankyousignplz:
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WinterImperfect Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
While I'm not a huge fan of the first part, I find the others very interesting and well written :3
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:iconleyghan:
leyghan Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for stopping by and commenting. :)
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012
:clap: Congratulations!
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:iconleyghan:
leyghan Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:iconthankyousignplz:
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Shabboth Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2011  Professional Writer
Such a deft touch on the dialect. Not so heavy it's distracting, but enough that it comes through clearly.

I have an aunt who is originally from Jamaica. She grew up in England, and so lost a lot of her accent, but reading these brought her mom (and her mom's patties, yum!) to the forefront of my brain. Thank you for that! :hug:

PS. Wonderful job illustrating the meanings of these anecdotally.
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leyghan Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Aw thanks. I'm glad this struck a chord with you.

Ooh, Jamaican patties...I remember them well from my trip to JA in '95. Now you've got me drooling.
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2011   Writer
These are all good and easily pictured, not to mention really fun to read.
You've got a fine, light and funny touch relating all of these. Thank you. :+fav:
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:iconleyghan:
leyghan Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks xIntwtch. :hug:
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2011   Writer
You're welcome, "Fun." :hug:
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somnomollior Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2011   Writer
The last one is my favourite - it made me laugh out loud.
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:iconleyghan:
leyghan Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
The last one's my favourite too. :)
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DerelictVampire Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2011
This is wonderful.
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:iconleyghan:
leyghan Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much. :heart:
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:iconriparii:
riparii Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2011
just a wee bit of a feature: [link]
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:iconleyghan:
leyghan Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :glomp:
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RawPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2011   Photographer
Such a strong tone and atmosphere in this, certainly personalizes it and makes it unique. :)
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:iconleyghan:
leyghan Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks Carly. Just trying new things. :)
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RalfMaximus Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I LOVE THIS!

You kyaan put mongoose to watch chicken

My favorite. Prolly cus I've been both mongoose and chicken at different times in my life...
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:iconleyghan:
leyghan Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks love. That one's my favourite too. Mmmm mangoes.
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almcdermid Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:clap: The sound is a bit different but it still reminds me of Hawaii. Ever consider writing haiku in this voice?
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:iconleyghan:
leyghan Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
No but I just might try it. Thanks for the suggestion. :)
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:iconalmcdermid:
almcdermid Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I look forward to it. :)
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