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*Flash fiction Island style

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Jesus saves!  I cast you out in the name of Jesus!  So screams the preacher man slamming his palm against foreheads to drive out demons.  Not more than a few feet away from the pulpit, an eighteen year-old member of his congregation claps her hands and shouts hallelujah!  

Jesus' name is again invoked a few days later as they lay sweating and groaning in the back seat of a rented car.

-See me and come live with me is two different ting


II

The girl is pretty in an unrefined way, brash and loud and totally unselfconscious.
Baby powder coats her neck, chest and back, visible in her low cut top.  

Her rival, five years her senior, cuts her eye in contempt. 'Country booboo,' she thinks. 'She look like fish ready to fry.  Plus she skin ashy and she look like she doan know how to use hot-comb.'  

Despite her belief in her superiority, her man doesn't come back.

-Puss and dog no have de same luck


III

The little boy is a-tremble with anticipation and fear.  Mustn't get caught.  He was in for a good lickin if he was.  Ah but the alluring scent of the mangoes on the vendor's tray―promising tongue-tying sweetness, is more than he can bear.  He can already feel the weight of the mango; his teeth ripping into the gold-green skin and into the pulpy flesh―feel the juice spurt into his mouth.

'Watch de tray,' his uncle had said before going down the road to the local shop to get himself a beer.  'But don't you eat me mangoes, dey is for sale.'  

'Jus one,' the little boy promises himself glancing anxiously down the road.  Then two mangoes later, 'jus one more.'

-You kyaan put mongoose to watch chicken
We have a lot of amusing colloquial sayings on my Island. Decided to have a little fun with a few. Hope you like.

Edit: Gotta I'm surprised to see this get a DD but yay! It's always nice to be recognized.

Thanks so much to *xlntwtch for the suggestion and to ^thorns for the feature. And thanks to everyone who faved and commented. :sun:
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Given 2012-10-03
You Can Say That Again by *leyghan The suggester writes, "Three island sayings are explained here, in a wonderful flash vignette written by a talented islander. This is flash fiction at its finest, both informative and informal." ( Suggested by xlntwtch and Featured by thorns )
:iconraspil:
raspil Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012   Writer
these were cute little stories -- very well done!
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:iconleyghan:
leyghan Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :hug:
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Daghrgenzeen Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the DD, well deserved. :D
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:iconleyghan:
leyghan Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you KuiskailevaTuuli. That's such an interesting name. Is it Finnish?
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:icondaghrgenzeen:
Daghrgenzeen Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You are welcome. :) And yes, it's in Finnish and means 'whispering wind'. :giggle:
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:iconleyghan:
leyghan Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for letting me know what it means. :)
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:icondaghrgenzeen:
Daghrgenzeen Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem, I like sharing Finnish words and their meanings with people. :aww:
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13thMurder Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012
somehow reminds me of rasputina's lyric style...
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:iconleyghan:
leyghan Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Not familiar with rasputina but thank you. :)
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13thMurder Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012
here: [link]
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